Hey guys, I'm trying to get a PWM internship this fall semester. I'm about to start cold emailing some local places. I have two different templates.
I'd appreciate to hear everyones opinions on how I can improve them or which one is better.
TEMPLATE #1
Hello,
My name is XXXX and I am a sophomore Finance Major at the XXXXX. I am very interested in receiving as much real-world experience in the Wealth Management field before I graduate and I am writing to express interest in a college internship during the fall semester.
An internship at your Columbia branch would be a valuable stepping-stone for me in terms of my career goals as well as an opportunity for me to develop important industry skills.